305 words CJ you have a self-esteem issue because this daily was really good! You need to give yourself more credit, you are an amazing writer <33 I really loved the imagery and description of this piece. The word choices you used were spot on, and the way you described the scenery was very vivid! I love all the mentions of colors, it really represents how vibrant and lucid their relationship is; it's a fantastic use of pathetic fallacy <33 Furthermore, I love the allegory of the sunrise and how it represents the eternality shared in their relationship, and also the warmth and renewal that comes with committed romance-- that was very impressive! Lastly, I really liked the reference to nutmeg in the end; historically, nutmeg has been used superstitiously for people to fall for certain individuals, and the subtle way you mentioned it in the ending was a really great use of symbolism <3 In terms of critique, I think this piece could benefit from more action. Without any action, the piece could bore the audience really quicky, since the majority of this piece is dialogue, inner thoughts, and passively watching a sunrise. If the two characters could be doing something while watching the sunset-- say, having a picnic or pointing out the stars or setting off fireworks-- that could help hold the audience's attention! I also think there is so much potential in the very subtle metaphors you scattered throughout this piece-- please look into ways to expand or subvert these metaphors, because i think you're a genius for being able to include so many metaphors in one piece <3 lastly, I think the paragraph with the question mark is a bit confusing structure-wise; i think you could combine the two sentences in that paragraph instead. Anyways, thanks for letting me critique this fantastic piece!
