First, Snowyfawnn's thoughts: "This was the queerest little passage my mind has ever conjured, and perhaps will ever conjure. I couldn't shake off a sense of depth it has, though. Please please PLEASE share your thoughts in the comments, but please also deeply consider and ponder over it before quickly judging as you may be unaccustomed to such styles of writing."
Now for my thoughts: Spelling and Grammar: 9.7 out of 10. I spotted only one potential error, and even that could be considered correct. Idea Originality: 9 out of 10. I can see influences from other stories and genres, but the idea itself is completely original. Idea Execution: 10 out of 10. This is a very unusual idea, but Snowyfawnn pulled it off beautifully. Well done. Dialogue: N/A Character Development: N/A Overall: 9/10 Other: The character's thought processes are unusual, but still fit the voice of the story. The elements remind me of Lovecraft or Poe, and the theme is vaguely remeniscent of lucid dreaming. Thanks to @Snowyfawnn for the original story.
