This is just some constructive criticism for your lines. 1) For Line 1, I'd like you to put a little of a pause in between each 'well.' In the comic, each word is in it's own 'bubble,' so I'd imagine there's some pause in between. 2) Line 2, your voice just sounds flat and neutral. But that is not what's happening on with this scene. I would imagine a snark in Dish's voice, and maybe a little laugh at the end, like he's making fun of them. 3) Line 3 is good, but I'd like your tone to make it more like an order to the others. Make it sound a bit stronger and louder, maybe a hint of anger in the voice. 4) For line 4, Dish just sounds a bit scared, but remember, he's a snarky and self-righteous cat. He is pathetic, but acts all confident. When you retake, I'd like you to make Dish sound sort of confident. 5. Line 5, I was thinking you could make his voice sort of...happier? Like Blackbird was distracted when pinning Dish down, so then Dish sort of kicked him. Dish would be happy that he kicked Blackbird, and not really angry This is a great try for your first time, and thank you for getting it done so quickly! Everything else is good, I put the final lines that are accepted into the final dubbed version in this project. You're doing amazing, keep up the good work, and good job! I'd love it if you could remix this project with the changes, thanks!
