Here are some constructive criticism for your lines! 1) Line 1, the 'what is it' could be more clearer. 2) For line 8, I'd like for your voice to take on a 'storytelling' tone, and speak a bit slower and have pauses between words and sentences. The emotion in your voice for this time was very strong and powerful, and I love it. Thank you. Please remix with changes, ty! <3 (might not be able to respond until after hiatus, but we'll see)
