||Paint Me With Your Thoughts Part One||-Book Review

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||Paint Me With Your Thoughts|| By @Cinderpelt3303 Hello all you people of the Book Rating Studio. I'm Christsflower and this is my completely 100% honest review of Paint Me With Your Thoughts Part One by @Cinderpelt3303. Now this is yet another Warrior Series Spin off. They Eem to be taking over scratch and I don't mind at all because I'm a huge fan myself. However, @Cinderpelt3303 adds a darker twist to the already dark series. I'm not going to spoil anything but from reading Part One, this is what I can allow you to know: Basically, the main character is Firefly. he's a pup who just wants to have friends but gets bullied. Originally, he had wanted to join a small pack of pups in one of their games but ended up slinking back into the den with no one to play with and be a companion except his mother. Seeing him quiet she asks what's wrong and he gives some lame excuse which apparently he uses every time. He slaps at his mother to leave him alone and she replies, "Ok, only if you spend some time in the forest." Trying to encourage him to go out and explore a bit. he proceeds to go out and makes up an imaginary.... And that's all I'm telling because I'd be spoiling it and that, my dear readers, is taboo. So first off, here are all my positive thoughts so far about the story, how it's written, and the cover art, if you will. Pros: ~I do like how unlike so many writers on scratch you decided to write the story in the side bar instead of making us go through the trouble of continually pushing the space bar or arrow keys to get to the next part or "page." ~Going off my first point, lots of times writers will use swirly fonts in their projects and that makes is SUPER difficult to read so again, congrats on writing smarter and making it nice and easy to read. ~The cover art was ok. I'm not going to lie it wasn't overly fabulous or jaw dropping but I can see you put a lot of effort into it and for that I congratulate you. ~I do like the plot of the story. Now, since Warriors is a HUGE part of scratch now a days the story line was a bit similar to others I have read but you still pushed through and made it unique and interesting. I like that. Cons: ~Though it's an intriguing first part of a story, you do need to touch up on your overall grammar and the way you word things. It's not bad, but it's not perfect either. A little more polishing would be nice. ~I do wish you spent more time building up the character of Firefly before you tried to get an emotional response out of us readers. By that I mean you jumped straight into a scenario where we as the readers are suppose to feel sorry for him because he's bullied but, I mean, why should we? We just "met" Firefly. Again, it was't bad but it wasn't the best introduction. --- All in all, I'm giving ||Paint Me With Your Thoughts Part One|| a 8.5 out of 10 stars. Would I read more? Yes, I'm interested in seeing how the story unfolds and how Firefly deals with his family and being bullied. --- Also, a small note: This is 100% my opinion. Comment down below what your thoughts on the story is-I'll like to see if ya'll share the same opinions and views I do or possibly disagree? Let me know and thanks for reading :)