Wλʀɴɪɴɞ: There is a small amount of blood mentioned. It isn't described in depth, just enough to add concern and realistic feeling. ---- •✧※✧• ---- You can also view this at https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/574140/?page=1#post-5969735 ---- •✧※✧• ---- My first piece I have ever shared publicly :) I am pretty happy I am able to share this in time, since I procrastinated and pushed it off until I couldn't any longer. ---- •✧※✧• ---- The theme of this contest is "Two worlds". I have many pairs of worlds in this story. Ren's world of peace and Ash's world of strife is one example. The world in the village and the world in Ren's home is another. What are some other pairs you can find hidden in this story? Comment down below. ---- •✧※✧• ---- Press space or click the screen to start reading. Arrow keys or mouse to scroll/change chapters T to show your location numbers R to go to a certain location (Make sure to type it in exactly as it says, space and all) ---- •✧※✧• ---- There are six chapters, though the third is the shortest. ---- •✧※✧• ---- I think I need to work on my transitioning and keeping the conversations and actions realistic. Not everyone is outgoing and open. And the transitions between sections seem too forced and abrupt. What do you think? ---- •✧※✧• ---- Would you like me to write some more short(ish) stories? Comment ideas and opinions in the comments section. ---- •✧※✧• ---- P.S. Please don't hesitate to comment any improvements you think I could make or anything about the story you liked/didn't like. Feedback helps a lot! I'll try to keep an open mind about suggestions and am fine with constructive criticism, but if it doesn't help and isn't nice, please keep it to yourself. ---- •✧※✧• ---- P.P.S. Feel free to put the link to your writing below if you want my opinion on it! ---- •✧※✧• ---- ---- •✧※✧• ---- You must like reading.
Thank you, @--PolarBear-- for hosting the writing contest! Except for the mouse trail ( @--PolarBear-- ), all the script is by me. (Music by @--PolarBear-- ) ---- •✧※✧• ---- And thank you to you, for taking the time to read this and maybe even give some feedback! ---- •✧※✧• ---- You can use the script with credit and the wording if you give all credit for it to me.
