sorry I lowkey graded your work ... the wiggly lines are the parts which I can't understand & the green lines r the parts that I corrected. a few notes. ★☆ Chap. prologue page 2 - I changed ''attackers'' to pursuers for a clearer introduction of the people who were chasing Marelin's mother (?) since you didn't mention them attacking her. Chap. 1 page 1 - I'm not too sure about who's Pov this is, so I edited it to be Marelin's since the story is centered around her LOL. it's pretty confusing when you write a pov then switch to another one without a border. ''Marelin was playing by the shore of the sea.'' is third-person pov and ''I giggled happily ... into it.'' is first-person pov. article for reference: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/first-second-and-third-person/ also page 1: edited the ''drats'' & added ''--'' I personally prefer 2 hyphens but you can use 1 too!! (''-'' one hyphen) also also pg 1: ''see your element'' i wouldn't say see, more like ''revealed'' + afew grammar mistakes, + ''which I think is'' Marelin doesn't know what her element is, so I think it would be better to say ''will be''. page 2 - i put a wiggly line below ''the five elders'' because I genuinely do not know how to edit this,, you gotta introduce the five elders b4 putting a ''the'' in front
halfway done @mrm2950 for the og work
