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Hello! I am writing a book ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I just need some criticism to make it better for release, Also let me know if this should become a series! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Plot: Athena is a 13 year old girl who lives in a town near the athena region/territory. Athena is named after her great grandma Lakota Athena Madden. Athena chases a morpho butterfly (Nosa) but has an asthma attack and passes out. She is found and picked up by spice and gets carried to the athena region. The animals create a circle around Athena giving her breath. When Athena wakes up, she has a special ability to talk to animals. Athena’s best friend Felix finds Athena and sees her talking to animals and understands. Athena goes to her grandma about it and her grandma tells her that her great grandma Lakota was also able to talk to animals and that Athena has other powers,and is the bond between animals and man. Athena’s parents, Laura, and Moe. Are the kings assistants, and know what the king will do if he finds out athena is the bond, because when he was a kid he went forging and took the heart of athena which was a beehive and got attacked by all the animals in Athena. Now he is missing an eye, and has a long scar across stomach. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Characters: Civilians: Fluff: Brown Deer with fluffy cotton like tail, (heterochromia) One green eye, one blue eye. Fem Moss: A large brown and white norwegian forest tom-cat with light green eyes and a sharp temper. Male Spade: A 17 pound sloth, w/ large green eyes and mysterious spade like patch of hair on stomach. Male Forager: Sparrow: A crimson red fox with golden eyes and a scar on his shoulder. Male Nosa: Purple morpho butterfly likes to fly above the nation of Athena.Female Volka: A small brown she-wolf with a nice personality. Fem Nurser: Vera: Green Anaconda, protects mice, although is tempted to eat them. fem Rina: Keeps Vera in check, European wildcat. Obsessed with Fern Fem Fern:Keeps Rina from scaring the cubs/kits Male also rina’s lover Spice: Amber Colored fox, w/ brown eyes,and spots on chest. Fem .Nile: A sphinx cat,with blue eyes. Humans: Athena: Passes out in the forest (asthma) animals help her to regain consciousness, she gains the ability to talk to animals. Felix: Athena's best friend who grows to realize he has a crush on athena. Athena’s grandma: She is always helping Athena and caring for her. violet/ human/ a pirate with red hair and purple eyes/ rude but kind to people she knows / reading, stealing, talking to her dog (dog's name is Fluffy) / none / TW: idk what you mean by that / people, it being hot outside, being on land / she/her / 19 ROYALS: Lauriel: Queen of athena, Missing Indochinese tiger. pregnant. (Ran away) Morpheus: King of athena, Lion Juliet: Liger, Lost in shipping crate, found her way back Guards: Pawna: Poison bullet dart frog, full body paralysis with one touch. (its selective)Fem Talon: A Large timid jaguar with a kind personality that enjoys fighting. Male ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Form: Name/ Species name/ Direct description of character/ Personality traits/ Hobbies/ Trauma (opt.)/ TW: / Pet peeves/ Pronouns/ Age