READ THIS AFTER: I did it! It's here! Well, partially, but I'll explain that all below. Sorry I took SO long! I'm just going to use this to talk, let's see if I can actually keep this brief. So first, this is my second draft- I rewrote pretty much everything. I'm not done, but I decided last week that you've waited long enough, so I'm sending you what I have and will hopefully get the rest done soon. I'm not happy with everything, but I don't think I ever will be, so here is this part one! I took your story description and went with it, though I'm not sure this is what you meant for me to do. (Awesome twist at the end of btw. I was like, "O-oh. That took a turn. But I'm very intrigued.") I decided to give this twist a name- Dante- and continue writing from his perspective. It's a bit of a mess, the part 2 I'm working on would really help clear up what Dante's goal is specifically and why he's a stable boy, so I'm sorry I don't have that yet. But I hope that some things about him are clear, like his not so subtle crush on Lupe. Yeah, I'm not used to writing romance in any way, but I just really thought it fit and would be interesting to do. It's sort of cheesy, I know. Ok a lot cheesy but that's just who I am. XD I'm worried Lupe seems annoying, I tried to fix it, but I think it was too subtle. So I'll just say what I was thinking: She likes him back and getting his help here was her way of spending more time with him. That's all I'm gonna say because continuing to talk seems like I bad idea right now. Lol Reaching the end I think: I have more ideas, things I feel need to be addressed, but they're not so important right now and plus, you should be able to come up with the ideas also. More than anything I'm scared I'll accidentally take over here. So yeah, here it is. I think that's everything I had to say.
Ok I lied, one more thing. When I write I hardly ever start at the beginning of something, as you can see here. So if you feel like writing something to continue this (And don't feel at all like you have to), feel to write from wherever you want- beginning, middle, end, backstories. Any character you want, Dante, Lupe, or make up a new one! Do keep in mind however that this has a part 2 that's continuing this day and I'm also bringing in a character who's sort of a mentor/someone-who's-making-sure-Dante-won't-mess-this-up. His name is Nerian. Sorry for all of this, but believe me, this could've been so much longer. XD I hope you're doing well! :) P.S. I am not a very confident person, especially when it comes to my writing. I have a love-hate relationship with it and I don't write often. So I don't know how you want this to work- if you want to go back and forth- but just know it might be really slow on my end at times or I might just have to take breaks some times. I don't know if you're wanting to create a whole story from this or not, what I took from what you said was that we could just write for fun and see what happens, no pressure. My ideas and motivation tend to bolt when they hear the words, "let's make this a whole story!" Or we could just write short things like this or just leave it here. Whatever. I don't wanna overwhelm you or myself. :))
