Hi!! I'm currently writing a story, and I want your honest opinions on it. Please give any suggestions and changes! 'Run' was the only thought in my head, repeating itself over and over. I glanced frantically around. There had to be a way out! Finally, to my right, I saw a dark alley. "Perfect!" I whispered. I leaped over a trash can, knocking it over and sending a cat running. Gosh, falling trashcans are loud. I heard the loud bark of an angry dog, and a new thought penetrated my mind: 'Hide.' I knew if I didn't find a place to hide within the next 10 seconds, I would be a goner. I ran my hand along the coarse brick wall and felt a small knob. Yes! There was a dark wood door that was barely visible in the small ray of light from the lantern at the end of the alley. I spun the doorknob and, sure enough, it was locked. Frantically, I searched around the door frame and under rocks. I heard footsteps in my direction. I could not let them find me, no matter what it took. I glanced down at my necklace, a clear little vial about halfway full of pink powder on a gold chain. I spun the vial in my hands. I remember the day Aggy had given it to me. She had woken me up at 6:00 A.M. on my 10th birthday to give it to me. After I had ripped open the package, she told me, “This powder will only work when you use it. It will give you the power to use your ability before you come of age. You must never use it unless your life is in danger. The more you use, the less power it will have.” At first, I didn’t believe it. Why would my life ever be in danger? And what could this so-called “magical powder” do to help me? I heard the loud sound of metal scraping against concrete. I had to do this, there was no other choice. If that man got to me, he would take me and lock me away forever. Although I wouldn’t die, I still considered this life-threatening; It would make the chances of having a normal life go from low to none. I popped off the cork and dumped a small puddle of the fluorescent pink powder into my hand.
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